IELTS Essay # Financial aid

IELTS Writing task 2
You should spend 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Providing financial aid to the poor can increase poverty.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

Sample Answer

Poverty has become a pressing problem across the globe. Governments in many countries take various measures to control the rising poverty levels. Giving monetary help to the poor is one of the most common methods followed globally. But, the effectiveness of this approach is often questioned by social reformers and economists. According to them, this measure can make the situation worse. I completely agree with this view and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.

Firstly, financial support does not provide the poor with a motive to become self-sustained. It seriously damages the spirit of self-development. The fundamental reason behind this is the psychological attitude which it creates in the minds of beneficiaries. If someone is getting money for their needs without doing any work, then why they would work. Even if the amount is less, they are willing to accept it. Such people resist any kind of change in their way of living.  This can be exemplified with unemployment benefit receivers who hardly try to find a suitable employment for themselves.

Another reason why I am against distributing money to the poor is that it affects the overall growth and development of a country. Research has shown that nations where citizens depend on monetary help experience a slow economic growth rate. A possible explanation for this could be the skewed distribution of the available funds. The money that is meant for the development of the nation is given to those who do not contribute to the economy in anyway. Therefore, it can be concluded that this solution creates a vicious cycle of poverty that is extremely hard to break.

To sum up, any government is responsible to fulfil the basic needs of its people. But, I strongly believe that providing financial help to the poor is not the answer. This practice should be discouraged. Other measures like skill development programmes, opening aided schools and hospitals, and creating more employment opportunities can yield far better results. In short, do not give fish to the poor, teach them how to fish. (341 Words)

 

Feel free to call for suggestions and queries.

phone icon

8439000086

8439000087

7055710003

7055710004

IELTS Band 7 Dehradun
Near Ballupur Chowk, Dehradun

email: info at ieltsband7.com

IELTS online simulator

IELTS BAND 7 Home page

Graph # Population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040

IETLS Writing Task 1 # Graph

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The line graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

Graph

Source: adapted from Cambridge IELTS 5

Sample Answer

The line graph illustrates the variations in the percentage of old people aged 65 and above in Japan, Sweden and USA over a 100-year period from 1940 to 2040.
In 1940, just under ten percent of the US population was 65 and over, the highest figure among the listed countries. Sweden and Japan stood at the second and third place respectively with nearly 7% and 5% population in this age range. In the next 50 years (i.e. 1940-1990), the curves followed strikingly similar upward trends in western countries. The proportion of elderly in the USA reached the mark of 15% whereas the percentage was slightly less than 15% in Sweden. In comparison, there was a small decrease of about 2% in the Japanese figures during this period.

Between 1990 and the present, the American figures remained constant while Sweden and Japan experienced a gradual increase in their percentages. Notably, these proportions are expected to rise dramatically in the next two decades in all the three countries. By 2040, the ageing population will account for nearly one fourth of the total population in these nations.

Overall, it is evident that the proportion of elderly people has risen in all the given countries. This trend is predicted to continue in the future and by 2040, these countries will have a similar number of old people (about 25%). (225 Words)

 

Feel free to call for suggestions and queries.

phone icon

8439000086

8439000087

7055710003

7055710004

IELTS Band 7 Dehradun
Near Ballupur Chowk, Dehradun

email: info at ieltsband7.com

IELTS online simulator

IELTS BAND 7 Home page

Improve the Writing Score in IELTS

To improve the writing score, IELTS candidates should use effective language in their letters.
Let us look at some important phrases which can be used in a letter of complaint. You don’t have to memorize all of them, just choose one relevant phrase for each paragraph and use the same in all letters of complaints.

For Paragraph 1 (Introduction of the letter)
  • I am writing to complain about ……
  • I am writing in regard to ……
  • The reason I am writing to you is ………..
  • I am writing to express my concern about ………..
  • I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with ……….
  • I would like to bring the matter of ………to your attention
  • I would like to draw your attention to ………
For Paragraph 2 (Explaining the problem)
  • You can imagine how unhappy I was to discover …..
  • I was supposed to receive ……… Unfortunately, that never happened.
  • I regret to inform you that your service was below my expectations.
  • I regret to inform you that your service was highly disappointing.
  • When I tried to contact the manager by phone, no one could offer a sensible answer to me.
  • When I called the office, no one responded.
  • I contacted your manager/representative last week ….. Unfortunately, he denied me the service that I requested.
For Paragraph 3 (Proposing a solution)
  • I insist on getting a refund of …
  • Please look into this matter as soon as possible.
  • I believe that this matter deserves your urgent attention
  • I hope you can settle this matter by giving a full refund of the amount ….
  • The ideal solution would be …

Conclude your letter in the following manner:
If you know the name of person you are writing to, you should write
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Your name

If you don’t know the name of person you are writing to, you should write
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Your name

Some sample letter are here… at category->IELTS-preparation->IELTS-letter-writing

 

Feel free to call for suggestions and queries.

phone icon

8439000086

8439000087

7055710003

7055710004

IELTS Band 7 Dehradun
Near Ballupur Chowk, Dehradun

email: info at ieltsband7.com

IELTS online simulator

IELTS BAND 7 Home page

IELTS General Training Writing Task 1: Letter of complaint

Writing Task 1 : Letter of complaint

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently bought a piece of equipment for your home but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter

  • describe the problem with the equipment
  • explain what happened when you phoned the shop
  • say what you would like the manager to do

Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,

Sample Answer

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the inferior quality of a mobile phone which I bought from your renowned store last week. The first malfunction that I noticed in the phone was its short battery life. Its battery discharges within an hour of charging. Apart from that, the device becomes extremely hot when I charge it. I found another problem when I clicked some photos. Even though this phone has an eight mega pixel camera, the photos were terribly blurred. Initially, I thought my hand shook while taking the pictures. But, even after keeping the phone in a fixed position, the same problem persisted. You can imagine how unhappy I was to discover these technical faults in such an expensive model. Naturally, I contacted the store to report the problem. Your representative said that this model was out of stock and I would have to wait for a week for replacement. Unfortunately, I did not receive any information about the new stock arrival in the last three weeks. When I called the representative, he was unable to give a sensible answer to me. I am very disappointed with both the equipment and the service I have received. Therefore, I expect a full refund of 30,000 rupees as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Priya Chamoli

This sample answer contains 219 Words.

 

Feel free to call for suggestions and queries.

phone icon

8439000086

8439000087

7055710003

7055710004

IELTS Band 7 Dehradun
Near Ballupur Chowk, Dehradun

email: info at ieltsband7.com

IELTS online simulator

IELTS BAND 7 Home page

1 13 14 15 16 17 22